Read the essay:
Did you know you can save water in your homes by doing a few simple tasks each day? I have recently read two texts: Watch Your Water and Valuable Water. These two texts address the problem of wasting water. There are many ways to save water. In this thesis, some ways to conserve water both inside and outside of their homes will be addressed.
First, there are many things you can do inside your house to save water. You can change your toilet, facet, and shower head to low flow models. Also, taking showers instead of baths and turning the faucet off when you brush your teeth can help. The text says, "these two small acts can save gallons of water each day."
There are many things you can do outside your house to save water. Instead of washing your car at home, go to an automatic car wash. Reuse water outside as much as possible. One example of this is catching rainwater and using it to water your plants later. If you must water your lawn, do so in the early morning or evening. The text says, "watering your lawn in the afternoon will result in a lot of water being quickly evaporated by the hot sun."
In conclusion, there are many ways people can conserve water, both inside and outside of their homes. Be aware of your use of water when brushing your teeth, taking a shower, water you lawn, or washing your car. Imagine, if every person made an effort to conserve water. Millions of gallons of water would be saved. It is important to save water both inside and outside of the home.
Discussion Question:
Make a list of at least 4 things this person did well (be specific)? What is 1 thing they could have done better (be specific)?
1.I like your hook
ReplyDelete2.I like your your topic
3.I like your concluding statmen
4.I like your evidence
1.should not put evidence in your conclusion
I like how you underlined the texts.Next, I liked the hook.After that,I like the conclusion.Last,I like how you worded the texts.One thing you should have did better is:you said you could put water both inside and outside to save it.
ReplyDelete1. He changed toliet, facet, and showerheads.
ReplyDelete2. He turned of the facet after brushing his teeth.
3. He saved rain water to water his plants.
4. He took showers instead of bath's.
1. He could get every person make an effort to conserve water because it would save millions of gallons.
One thing I like about the essay was it gave information. Another thing is that it had a really good hook because it says the reader can help for something.It gave good textual evidence too. lastly it doesn't have any grammar mistakes. One thing I think they could have done better was that there wasn't enough evidence to support the reasons that they had.
ReplyDeleteThey need to take out Be aware in their conclusion.In their introduction I like the way they named the two text.I like the way they underlined the text in the in the introduction.I like the way they used comma in series.I like the way they used correct gramer.
ReplyDeleteWe like how they said,"these two texts address..." We also liked their use of transition words. Another thing that we like is the examples. The last thing we like is the hook because it was easy to understand. They could have reread their passage because they said, "water you lawn" when they should have put water your lawn.
ReplyDelete1.INCOMPLETE SENTENCE 2.CAPATLIZE INSIDE QUOTES 3. COMMAS 4. DO NOT USE ALOT OF QUESTIONS
ReplyDeleteWE LIKE YOUR TRANSITION WORDS,AND EVIDENCE FROM TEXT
We loved how you came up with your finial thought we also loved your conculsion and we also loved how you gave direct quotes. We believe that you could have improved your hook so it would sound a little better
ReplyDeleteI like their hook.I like how they used in this thesis.I like their purpose.I like how they underlined their text.And they could have done better with their examples.
ReplyDeletei like your hook beacause it was strong i also like how you under lined your text and
ReplyDeletei like how specific you were
i like how you listed your was to save water
you could have been better on your finale thought
He had a good hook.He also used good transition words.He used his quotations right.He gave the right information.One thing he could improve is capitalizing at the start of a sentence.
ReplyDelete1.Good Hook: Had a good question.
ReplyDelete2.Good Body:You used A.C.E.
3.Good Conclusion: You summarized the entire essay.
4.Good Explanation: It never got off topic.
----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------