We have discussed the differences between an opinion essay and an explanatory essay. Today, I want you to write an introduction for the task we are working on in writing. Be sure to include all the necessary parts of an introduction. I expect you to be creative with your hook: get my attention. Remember, the only way to get better at writing is to write. Happy writing.
We need electricity for many reason . Like we need it to call when were in trouble.
ReplyDeleteWe need it to look stuff up that we do not known.
I think that we need electricity.
Do you think that we should have electricity
I like your ending part but you forgot your names for the text
DeleteYou misspelled some words
Deleteyou did a great job on the text. but you forgot to name the text.
Deleteyea we need POWER
DeleteI LIKED YOUR introduction!
You misspelled some words
DeleteIt was good.but u fergot the name of the text
DeleteWe need to look up things a lot you did not name the text GOOD JOB
DeleteYou forgot to name the text but it's still good.
DeleteYou did great,but you forgot to name your text,you misspelled a few words,and you didn't put how they go through hydroelectric power and wind turbines. You did a great introduction too! :)
DeleteDo you enjoy having lights on at night and getting cold food and drinks out of the refridgerator? Then you can thank electricity! In groups we were talking about "HYDROELECTERIC POWER "and "Capturing the wind". These are two sources of power we can be thankful for.
ReplyDeleteI really like your hook but you could have done better on showing the importance in the topic. Otherwise I really liked your introduction!;]
DeleteGreat hook! We all definitely can be thankful for electricity. You need to remember to include your focus, which means you need to tell me what you are going to do in this essay. One way to do that is, "In this essay, I will...."
DeleteGood Hook.
DeleteI really like your hook. But, you didn't write at least 6 or 7 sentences.
DeleteGood hook but be sure to name your text.
DeleteHydroelectric power and capturing the wind.What do you think about power.Your thinking that it is very useful but it is not in some cases. Power can all so hurt you very bad like texting and driving what can lead up to car hitting and ding.
ReplyDeleteNice sentence, but you used a period instead of a question mark.
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ReplyDeleteHydroelectric power and capturing the wind
Do you thank you thank you can live with no power in your house I know I cant. one day we will so use it in a good way.Hydroelectric power will not work forever one know.we need it to cook food.do u thank we need power in the world to day.
I liked your introduction it was great.
DeleteI did not like the first part though
your text is a awesome text and what i like about it is very long. but you mis spelled some of the words in the text.
DeleteGood job, but you need to add periods.
DeleteYOU MESSED UP A LITTLE BIT
DeleteHave you ever wondered if we get power from water or air?
DeleteIn this essay I will tell you about hydro electric power
and wind power.The to text are Hydro Electric Power and
Capturing the Wind.
You did great,but you put thank as in thank you. It is supposed to be think as in I think Mrs.McManus and Mrs.Cupples are cool. Also, you didn't put how hydroelectric power works and wind turbines.
DeleteWhat would it be like with out power?The titles are 'Hydroelectric Power',and 'Capturing the Wind'.Power is important for us because we need lights to see,water from the refrigerator,WiFi other stuff.In these text I am going to explain how each power source works,some benefits of each power source,and some problems with each power source.
ReplyDeleteI liked ow you talked about WiFi. And one bad thing about it is in the last sentence you put a comma.
DeleteYea we need lights to see, it is important to many people and you put a comma at the last sentence. GOOD JOB
DeleteEXILENT!!!!!!
DeleteHi,i'm Jacob and today i am going to explain how hydroelectric power and wind powerwork.So are you ready?Then lets get to it.One thing about hydroelectric power that it is our water and if we didn't have it we wouldn't have water power.And one thing about wind power is that it helps us breath.Oh yeah i forgot to tell you something hydroelectric power is the same thing as water power.And you don't haft to say wind power you can just say the wind or what we breath.
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You forgot to capitalize the I and I like your ending part about the wind
DeleteRelay good hook,but you forgot a space in your hook.
DeleteI liked your hook. And I really liked how you introduced your self.
DeleteI like your hook its good.
DeleteI did not like your paragraph.
Do you want to know two ways power comes from?My main focus is to show you two ways power comes from,and tell how it works.My two articles is hydroelectric power and capturing the wind.The reason we need power is that with out it we won't be able to have heaters,computers,phones,and nothing.This is why we need power!!!
ReplyDeletenice story
DeleteI really like your hook.
DeleteGood story, but you used is instead of are.
DeleteDo you know why we have electricity? Well,I am going to tell you why.The two names of the text are "Hydroelectric Power" and "Capturing the Wind." I am going to tell you how each power source works. It is important to have electricity because we use it every day at school,home,and every where else.
ReplyDeleteYou had a good hook but,you did not really say your focus.
Deletenice passage
DeleteGOOD JOB!!!!
DeleteI loved your introduction.
DeleteI really like how you worded that adrian!!!
DeleteDo you want to know two ways power comes from?My main focus is to show you two ways power comes from,and tell how it works.My two articles is hydroelectric power and capturing the wind.The reason we need power is that with out it we won't be able to have heaters,computers,phones,and nothing.This is why we need power!!!
ReplyDeleteThat is a nice hook. I do like the method of using a question for a hook. Don't forget, you are also going to tell the benefits of alternative power.
Deleteyou put a question mark you should have finished the sentence.
DeleteGreat hook! Overall great introduction!
DeleteWhat do you think could we live with out power? Today we will talk about the passages Hydroelectric Power and Capturing the Wind. Power is important because we use power all the time, power is all around us. I will tell you how it works. I will also tell you benefits and problems.
ReplyDeleteEverything is good except for the third sentence you have a comma.
Deletedo you think we really need power? I think that we need power because without power we would not have warm water good entertainment and much more. I am going to get all my information from two text "Hydroelectric Power" and "Capturing the Wind". I am going to tell some benefits and some problems of hydroelectric power and wind power.
ReplyDeleteYou had a good focus but,you for got to capitalist the beginning of your hook.
DeleteYou forgot your capital letter at the beginning of your sentence
DeleteYES NEED POWER
DeleteYou did not capitalize do.YOU did exalint job on your. good job.
DeleteI really like your introduction. I think you should go back and look at your first sentence I think do needs to be capitalize do.
DeleteGreat hook but you forgot the capital letter, but it is an awesome hook.
DeleteHow can we save power? Can we use hydroelectric power or can we use wind turbines? Today I will be telling you about how Hydroelectric Power and Capturing the Wind works.I will also tell you some benefits.I will tell some problems.
ReplyDeleteYou did not use 7 or 5 sentences.
DeleteWhat would it be like without power? With the two texts "Hydroelectric power" and "Capturing the Wind" I'm going to write an article and answer that question.This topic is important because fossil fuels aren't going to last forever and we will need a new power source when it runs out. In this article I'm going to explain how each power source works,tell some benefits,and problems of each power source.
ReplyDeleteI like your hook but, the with the two texts it needs a comma.
DeleteHave you ever thought about power running out and there is no more power? Well I am going to talk about two more ways of power.The first one is Hydroelectric Power and Wind Power.I am going to tell y'all some good thing about Hydroelectric Power and Wind Power. And some thing of why we should save some power. I am going to explain how each power source works.Tell some benefits of each power source. And I am going to tell some problems with each power source.
ReplyDeleteI love your hook and your whole paragraph!!!
DeleteYou have a good hook and ya I never thought about it running out.
DeleteWhat would life be like without power.I will tell you the how power is important in"Hydroelectric Power" and in "Capturing the Wind".We need power because without power the water wouldn't run.You couldn't watch T.V, you couldn't play video games.So,what I am trying to say is nothing would work without,water power and wind power.In this paper I will show you benefits and problems in"Hydroelectric Power"and in"Capturing the Wind".
ReplyDeleteLIKE THAT INTRODUCTION BRO.
DeleteYou did a nice job of showing how power is important to kids. That's the audience the task identified. Good job. In your hook, you asked a question, but didn't use a question mark.
DeleteWe have power all around use we use it every day.What would we do with out it?This essay will be about power. The texts I will use"Hydroelectric Power" and "Capturing the Wind.It is important to have power.
ReplyDeleteYou didn't use 7 sentences.
DeleteI like your hook I really like the part where you pot "...What would we do with out it."BUT you could have done better on the importance of the topic
DeleteI will be explaining the two articles the aticals are hydroelectric power and wind power.And I will tell some benefits of each articles, and tell some problums. What would life be without power?One reason that hydroelectric power and wind power is important is that we will not be aebel to charge our phones. Another reason is that with out power we will not be abel to whach
ReplyDeleteTV if we don't have power.
nice hook vernon
ReplyDeleteDo you know why electricity is important well its important because if we didn't have electricity than we wouldn't have pizza or other food that we like. Next if we didn't have electricity our cloths wouldn't be clean. Next if we didn't have electricity we wouldn't have air conditioning. Last if we didn't have electricity we wouldn't have devices like a ps4 or xboxs.
ReplyDeleteWhat will we do with out power?Well i'm going to tell you how hydroelectric power works and how wind turbins work,Tell some benefits of each power source,Tell some problem with each power source. The two text we have are HYDROELECTRIC POWER,and Capturing the Wind.Capturing the Wind tells us how wind turbins work and the problem with them and the good things about them.HYDROELECTRIC POWER works,it tells us the good things and the bad things
ReplyDeleteHi. I am going to tell you why Hydroelectric Power is important. Hydroelectric Power is important to us because if we didn't have it we wouldn't have lights, we wouldn't have T.V, and we wouldn't have electronics. One day we might run out of power and that won't be good. Some benefits of Hydroelectric power are: Several countries, including Canada, Brazil, New Zealand, and Switzerland, produce the majority of their electricity through hydropower and another on is: It's the cheapest way to generate electricity today. If we didn't have power we really couldn't do anything that we like today. It is also important for businesses and factory's because they use power for lights, maybe electronics, and machines. We use power for cars too. If your car has a touch screen or you can connect to Bluetooth you need power to do that also. And if we didn't have power I wouldn't be typing this right now. That is why Hydroelectric Power is important.
ReplyDeleteHow do you think we get electricity? Well,we can get it through water and wind. Water will go through a gate and in a propeller,and then it goes in a power line. Wind helps get electricity through wind turbines. That's how you'll get electricity through wind and water. Wind and water are important because of electricity.
ReplyDeleteYou did a good job but you need to end with what your going to do in the essay for example "In this essay I will..."
DeleteGood hook,but next time you need to name your texts and tell your focus
DeleteHow would it effect you if we didn't have electricity? Everybody around the world now mostly only uses electricitity. We use electricity for everything for example our phones,hoe else would we communticate with somebody who lives in Calafornia? In this essay i will tell you the importance of elecrticity.
ReplyDeleteGood hook,but next time name your texts
DeleteMany of us use fossil fuels to generate our electricity. We use it to do many things,like watch television and play electronics. Life would be pretty boring without those, right? So, do we do when we run out of fossil fuels? Two solutions are hydroelectric and wind power. They are both great ways to generate electricity, plus they never run out! In this thesis, I will discuss the pros and cons of hydroelectric and wind power.
ReplyDeleteYou did extremely well but one thing you can improve is name your text next time
DeleteGood job Baylee! I liked how you used the words pros, cons, and thesis!
DeleteYou did really well and I agree with Payton next time if you have a text you need to name it other than that great job
DeleteDo you think electricity is important? I will be writing about why electricity is important. The first article is Hydroelectric Power and the second one is Capturing the Wind. Electricity is important because if we didn't have it our world would be different. We wouldn't have computers, phones and heaters. Ya our world would be different!
ReplyDeleteHow does hydroelectric power and wind power work? "Hydroelectric Power" and "Capturing the Wind" both have facts about hydroelectric power and wind power. Hydroelectric power is important because it is a renewable source of energy and will never run out. Wind power is important for the same reasons, it is a renewable source of energy and will never run out. In this essay I will talk about both hydroelectric power and wind power.
ReplyDeleteNice job, Seth. You had a good hook and you mentioned both stories we read.
DeleteGood job identifying texts. I don't see anything wrong with it.
DeleteGreat hook but know how to use your commas better.
DeletePicture this... someone just broke their leg and you need to get them to the hospital and then you realize you don't have a car! What are you going to do carry them there on your bike?!? In this essay,I am going to tell you why electricity is so important.
ReplyDeleteLove the hook but you forgot somethings
DeleteDo you like to come inside to get warm,after you have been playing outside in the cold? I do. ELECTRICITY is really important. '' Hydroelectric Power'' talks about using water for electricity." Capturing the Wind" talks about using air for electricity. This is really important because eventually we are going to run out of fossil fuels. In this article, I will talk about hydroelectric and wind electricity.
ReplyDeleteI like your hook.You said it uses air for electricity.
Deleteyou did a really good job writing your statement I really can't find anything wrong with it so that means you did a good job at writing
DeleteDo you have a cell phone? A lamp in your room? Or maybe even a computer? Well, all of those items run on electricity. Here's another question, where does all that electricity come from? Recently I have read two texts on electricity and how it's made; "Hydro Electric Power" and "Capturing the Wind". In this article I will explain how hydro electric dams and wind turbines produce electricity, along with some problems and benefits of these two power machines.
ReplyDeleteI liked your hook but you forgot to indent.
DeleteImagine life without electricty,this means you would not be able to watch TV and you wouldn't be able to do alot of things that require electricty. I have recently read two passage "Hydroelectic Power" and " Capturing The Wind" that mainly talk about how important electricty is. In this essay, I will give some reasons why we need electricty and how life would be difficult without it.
ReplyDeleteI love your hook and how you named the texts!!!
DeleteNice introduction, Payton. Remember next time to include Hook
DeleteWhat would all of us do with out power? In this essay, I am going to give you some details on the two passages I have read, "Hydroelectric Power," and, "Capturing The Wind." Hydroelectric power is in the water and Wind power is in the air. Hydroelectric power plants can be harmful to migration patterns and fish in the water. Wind power can be harmful to animals that migrate too. They are both similar in many ways because they both produce power.
ReplyDeleteGreat hook I have always thought about that because if you think about it mostly everything has something to do with electricity. I do not see any mistakes.
DeleteI like how you started with a question. Next, time remember to say what you are about to do.
DeleteWhere do we get power from? Why is power important? There are two ways to get power. One is wind power another is water power. Wind power comes from Wind Turbines and water power is called Hydroelectric Power. My information will come from "Hydroelectric Power" and "Capturing The Wind". In this essay I am going to explain the importance of electrecity.
ReplyDeleteDo you like your cell phone or your TV? Well, both run on electricity. I have just read two texts, "Hydroelectric Power" and "Capturing The Wind". Hydroelectric Power and Wind Power both create electricity. Today in this thesis I will explain to you why these two electricity making processes are important
ReplyDeleteGood job! I like your hook. It looks like you forgot a period on the end though.
DeleteI love your intro. It really caught my attention . I also like how you named your texts. Next, time remember your period on the end.
DeleteYou forgot to indent but your focus was strong.
DeleteThere is power all around the world,but what if we run out? How will we cook our food? In "Hydroelectric Power" and "Capturing the Wind" they talk about how hydroelectric dams and wind turbines work. Electricity is very important because if we didn't have it the world would be very different. In this essay, I will write about why electricity is important.
ReplyDeleteHi I am going to tell you about hydroelctric power and wind power.Do want to use fossil fules and run out or use hydroelectric power and wind power and never run out?What inspired me to write this was two texts one called Capturing the wind and the other one was called Hydroelectric power.I mean te big piture is two power sourece is renewable the other is not renewable.The focus is Hydroelctric power and wind power .Life would be alot better
ReplyDeleteWe need electricity for many things that we do in our lives. Most of our electricity comes from fossil fuels. Fossil fuels are a nonrenewable source. So what will we do when we run out of the fossil fuels? Well, many people have invented Hydroelectric power. this invention uses water to make electricity. They have also created Wind turbines. They create power from wind. In the text you are about read you will learn how these two amazing inventions work.
ReplyDeleteElectricity we all need it right?I mean fossil fuels are running out and we need another source of electricity.In this thesis I will write an informative essay with the two text "HYDROELECTRIC POWER" and "CAPTURING THE WIND" to inform you on the benefits,how it works,and the problems of both of them.
ReplyDeleteHey i'm going to tell you why Hydroelectric power is important to us. It is very important to us because if we didn't have it we wouldn't have lights,we wouldn't have TV either and we love TV. Also,we wouldn't have electronics.EXAMPLES:phones,tablets,and stuff like that.One day we might run out of power and other things we need to survive.A benefit of Hydroelectric power is:it's the cheapest way to generate electricity today.If we didn't have power we couldn't do anything we do and like today. It is important for food businesses and other factory's to have power because they need lights to see,they need it to work machines, and to make our food. We use power for cars too.Also, if we didn't have power we couldn't type the things we are typing now.That is why Hydroelectric power is important.
ReplyDeleteHow do we get electricity?'Hydroelectric Power'and'Capturing the Wind'tells the benefits,issues,and how it works. Hydroelectric and wind power are important because fossil fuels are running out.Wind and Hydroelectric can't be used up and it won't run out.
ReplyDeleteDo you think you can live in a world without power? I couldn't! I have just read a text called "hydroelectric power" and Capturing the wind".Hydroelectric power is very important. That is what many towns uses for power. In this thesis I will be talking about both hydroelectric power and wind power!
ReplyDeleteI love your examples for things that run on electricity and how you used the words problems and benefits. Something you could fix, is put commas after transition words. Great introduction!
ReplyDeleteWant to live like a pioneer? One day we might if we don't stop using fossil fuels.One way to prevent this is using hydroelectric power* or wind power.I read "Capturing the Wind" and "Hydroelectric Power".I learned about two ways to stop the tragic event of running out of fossil fuels. Without power you wouldn't be reading this, you wouldn't be in an air conditioned/heated room, and you wouldn't be able to call people and tell them how awesome this thesis is. In this article I will teach you how hydroelectric and wind power work. So, don't be lazy, FINISH READING THIS ESSAY!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI am going to explain why Hydro electric power is good. i have recently read 2 articles one is capture the wind and the other is hydroeletric power. that is why hydro electric power is good
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